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Post by Phoenix on Mar 16, 2009 18:50:58 GMT -5
Any comments and/or suggestions for the fanfiction collab that Moongarm and I are writing can be posted here in this thread, that way, the flow of the story won't be disrupted by random member comments. 
So please do not post comments on the actual fic thread. Please post them in this thread.
-Rev
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Post by Phoenix on Mar 16, 2009 18:53:42 GMT -5
Oooh I like this! Great ideas, guys! 
Thanks, HK. ^^ And I've deleted your original post from the actual fic thread, so it won't disrupt the flow of the story. |
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Post by Saber on May 21, 2009 14:24:42 GMT -5
First off before I post my add in on here I would like to say brilliant. I will redit your posts for you for grammar errors and all that good stuff. Now please note. I may spell slightly different from you and Moongarm but it still means the same. Kira and Jango make a great couple by the way Rev <3¢¾. Now here is my post and please feel free to add more to it.
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Kayla Sabrina Solo a.k.a. Sabe was wandering inside the Entertainment District building. She had been hired to track down Jango and his companions. The Jedi wanted to know what they were up to. She was hired to work here undercover for the Jedi Order to help them with this investigation. She was a Jedi Knight though no one knew about her identity that worked here. She watched as a man and tow women entered the room and she smirked.
Now time to catch these guys, she thought.
She decided to do things in style or by following her instincts. She adjusted her belt and made sure her weapons were secure on her belt. No one knew she had a lightsaber hidden on her body. She walked over to the man and two women and said, "Hey stop right where you are!"
She pulled out her cable launcher that looked like a blaster and said, "Don't even think about running or I will blast you into space dust where you are standing at right now."
"Now you have no damn business entering this area because this a secure area," she said in a cool tone.
She could feel the Force strongly coming from the two women and could not sense anything from the man that was accompanying them.
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Post by Phoenix on May 21, 2009 21:53:19 GMT -5
Interesting. I'll add you post to the story once I discuss a few things with Moongarm. ( Wish you had MSN... -_-' )
And thanks for the compliments. :3
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Post by Saber on May 21, 2009 22:39:20 GMT -5
No problem. I wished I had MSN too but with my dail-up internet I would have to kill my damn internet. <>
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Post by Phoenix on May 22, 2009 15:14:39 GMT -5
Your post is good. However, you seem to have Kayla power-playing a bit.
" She pulled out her cable launcher and fired it at them and wrapped it around them, knocking them down to the ground. "
Give the other characters a chance to react to Kayla. ( And I'm assuming that it's Kira, Jango and Rune..Right? )
That's pretty much the only thing that bugs me. So I'd suggest fixing that.
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Post by Saber on May 22, 2009 18:51:41 GMT -5
Okay I can fix that. That's no problem at all boss XD. I got a little carried away with writing. I thought it would be funny. Have you told Moongarm about this yet. Redited my post. BTW thanks for letting me join in on y'alls story ;D *hugs* I hope Moongarm likes it.
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Post by Phoenix on May 22, 2009 19:28:05 GMT -5
I haven't talked to Moon yet. I'll spam her with text messages tonight, see if she can come online. ;D ( Gotta love knowing one of my staff in real life.  )
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Post by Saber on May 22, 2009 19:46:06 GMT -5
Cool I will be online as well just get me off my sites you know how to hunt me down.
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Post by Moongarm on May 25, 2009 21:11:59 GMT -5
As much as I just love being the bearer of destroying-your-idea news, there's a couple of issues, for a lack of a better word. First of all, Rune can't use the force, there's nada/zip/zilch in her or that she can use. However you want to word it. Second, Rune's already working for the Jedi Council as more or less an undercover agent... so it doesn't really make sense that your character would be doing the same. Now if you want her to be back up for Rune because the Jedi Council realizes that one snarky shapeshifter probably is gonna need some help with a bounty hunter and a slightly psychotic ex-dark lord, or something like that, I'm all for it ^_^
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Post by Phoenix on May 25, 2009 21:25:02 GMT -5
And regarding the no MSN, Saber. Moongarm came up with a good idea, you can use a website called 'Meebo'. You can chat online, and you don't need to download anything.
Just go Here
Although, you will have to go to hotmail.com to get a hotmail address...I think.  ?
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Post by Saber on May 26, 2009 16:30:21 GMT -5
Okay I will do that next weekend. I'm a little busy this week and I'm trying to get a part-time job atm. Thanks Moongarm for that suggestion. Now let me go save my post on Microsoft Word and your idea so give me like a week or few days to fix my post. I'll try not to beat my computer with a baseball bat and download that link Moongarm you and[/b] Rev are both geniuses.[/size][/color][/font]
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Post by Phoenix on May 26, 2009 16:39:02 GMT -5
XDDD You're quite welcome. :3
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Post by Saber on May 27, 2009 10:00:21 GMT -5
Kayla Sabrina Solo a.k.a. Sabe was wandering inside the Entertainment District building. She had been hired to track down Jango and his companions. The Jedi wanted to know what they were up to. She was hired to work here undercover for the Jedi Order to help them with this investigation. She was a Jedi Knight though no one knew about her identity that worked here. She watched as a man and tow women entered the room and she smirked.
Now time to catch these guys, she thought.
She decided to do things in style or by following her instincts. She adjusted her belt and made sure her weapons were secure on her belt. No one knew she had a lightsaber hidden on her body. She walked over to the man and two women and said, "Hey stop right where you are!"
She pulled out her cable launcher that looked like a blaster and said, "Don't even think about running or I will blast you into space dust where you are standing at right now."
"Now you have no damn business entering this area because this a secure area," she said in a cool tone.
She could feel the Force strongly coming from the two women and could not sense anything from the man that was accompanying them.------------------------------------------------------------------------------ Kayla Sabrina Solo a.k.a. Sabe was wandering inside the Entertainment District building. She had been hired to track down Jango and his companions. The Jedi wanted to know what they were up to. She was hired to work here undercover with Rune who was also working undercover for the Jedi Order to help them with this investigation. The Council had told her that she was to help Rune in case she needed backup and because they realized that she was a shape-shifter. She was a Jedi Knight though no one knew about her identity that worked here. She watched as a man and two women entered the room and she smirked.
Now time to catch these guys, she thought.
She decided to do things in style or by following her instincts. She adjusted her belt and made sure her weapons were secure on her belt. No one knew she had a lightsaber hidden on her body. She walked over to the man and two women and said, "Hey stop right where you are!"
She pulled out her cable launcher that looked like a blaster and said, "Don't even think about running or I will blast you into space dust where you are standing at right now. Now you have no damn business entering this area because this a secure area," she said in a cool tone.
She could feel the Force strongly coming from the woman who was standing beside the bounty hunter, but she could not sense anything from the man or the other companion that was accompanying them.[/size][/color]
Made a couple grammar corrections.
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Post by Phoenix on May 27, 2009 14:03:31 GMT -5
Better. And I talked to Moongarm on Monday, and we've decided to bring you're post in after the first mission is complete. To quote Moongarm:
" Easy. Finish first mission, Rune reports, Jedi council goes "OMG WTF?!" and decides back up is in order... "
XD. It's just easier that way, then trying to figure out how to stick Kayla in during the current mission on Coruscant.
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